Query Materials

Pitch Polishing

Whether in preparation for Twitter pitch events, intimidating elevator talks at conferences, or query drafting, I’ll help you craft the perfect hook that will spark interest in your story.

One of the most difficult aspects of making a great pitch is figuring out how to narrow down your story into only a few sentences or paragraphs and not leave out anything important. There is this pressure to condense a manuscript into a bite sized nugget and often it makes us miss the point.

The point of a story pitch isn’t to strip away elements until you can squeeze your story into something small. It is to bring out and highlight that main core that makes your story worth telling.

My pitch polishing service helps guide you towards understanding what that core is and how best to represent it. This process includes –

  • Discussing your story to get to know it better, which may also require looking over your synopsis or outline to fully understand how it flows
  • Critiquing your current pitch to point out what you already do well and encourage better direction for areas that need editing
  • Offering written examples and phrase suggestions when composition help is needed
  • Teaching you how agents think and what they expect
  • Showing you how your story fits in the market and what can make it stand out
Logistics

My Pitch Polishing service offers you-

  • Up to three rounds of draft critique and support
  • Anytime e-mail contact
  • Up to two live chats (upon request)
  • Promotional support during media pitch events

At the price of- $50, with 75% off offered to those who only need Twitter pitch consultations.

Query Critique

Nearly everyone has heard the ever frustrating “it’s just not right for me” when receiving word back from a query. My goal is to help you understand what that means and how you can adjust your query to help reduce your chances of such feedback.

Ultimately, there is a percentage of successful querying that is completely up to chance and preference. But there are several elements to querying that will boost you to the top of pile. My query critique service aims to show you how to enhance those elements, giving you a query that hooks, informs, and looks marketable. This process includes-

  • Critiquing your current query to point out what you already do well and encourage better direction for areas that need editing
  • Nailing down a good pitch to be the supporting foundation for the rest of your query
  • Offering written examples and phrase suggestions when composition help is needed
  • Discussing typical query form and how to present your book versus explain your book
  • Teaching helpful dos and don’ts to help you avoid common mistakes
Logistics

My Query Critique service offers you-

  • Up to three rounds of draft critique and support
  • Anytime e-mail contact
  • Up to two live chats (upon request)

At the price of- $75

Synopsis Drafting

Scaling your book down to a single page synopsis is one of, if not THE, most daunting part of the querying process. You start cutting details to make it all fit and suddenly you’re left with, “This happened. Then this. And that. But it turned out okay. The end.”

The fatal flaw of a good many synopsis drafts is the mistake of giving a book report rather than a book presentation. A synopsis is not meant to be a fact sheet but a larger pitch, much like a full movie trailer is a longer version of a movie teaser.

My Synopsis Drafting service helps you find that spokesperson voice and guides you on your way to becoming your story’s best representative, showcasing your story in its most precise form. This process includes-

  • Critiquing your current synopsis to point out what you already do well and encourage better direction for areas that need editing
  • Organizing essential plot information for concise precision
  • Weighing the importance of secondary plots and characters
  • Giving examples and writing assistance to help shape tone and phrasing
  • Looking for holes made by lack of detail that may lead to confusion
  • Checking for employment all story essentials- setting, protagonist, inciting event, antagonist or opposition, rising conflict, high stakes, character growth, and resolution
Logistics

My Synopsis Drafting service offers you-

  • Up to three rounds of draft critique and support
  • Anytime e-mail contact
  • Up to two live chats (upon request)

At the price of- $100

First Three Chapters

Most manuscripts don’t need a full professional edit prior to querying traditional publishers since such a contract comes with its own rigorous editing. But often an agent or publisher will request a partial of your manuscript, usually up to three chapters, as part of your query materials, and it pays to have that first impression be its very best.

My three chapter edit focuses on making the beginning of your story a solid attractive sell, with attention to strong character appeal, plot entertainment, and technical proficiency. This process includes-

  • Thoroughly critiquing your current chapters to point out what you already do well and encourage better direction for areas that need editing
  • Reviewing characters to look for consistent development and ability to hook readers
  • Reviewing plot, which within three chapters should include
    • A clear setting
    • The protagonist and their current stasis
    • Inciting event that puts the plot in motion and changes the protagonist’s stasis
    • Most likely an antagonist or opposition
    • Protagonist’s first actions in response to inciting event and opposition
  • Discussing the story’s appeal, mystique, and ability to motivate further reading
  • Editing for proper grammar and punctuation
Logistics

My First Three Chapters service offers you-

  • Up to two rounds of draft critique and support
  • Anytime e-mail contact
  • Up to four live chats (upon request)

At the price of- $.012/per word

The Agent Package

My agent package includes all, or a combination of, my other query material services in one lump contract at a discounted rate.

Logistics

My Agent Package provides the same logistics listed for each respective query material service, all of which include-

  • Multiple reviews
  • Anytime e-mail support
  • Live chat upon request

This full combo package is offered at the rate of: $375 or the total of all services (Price is chosen according to whichever total is cheaper. This courtesy is offered due to the variable of word count which informs the price of the First Three Chapters edit.)

A partial combo will be rated according to which services are needed.